關(guān)于足球的初中英語作文點(diǎn)評(píng)
【習(xí)作要求】
馬虎搞到兩張全興隊(duì)對(duì)國(guó)安隊(duì)的足球比賽入場(chǎng)券。他電話通知好友趙華洋，約他放學(xué)后在新華公園門口碰頭，一起吃晚飯，然后去看球賽。二人在飯店美美吃了一頓，到付賬時(shí)馬虎才發(fā)現(xiàn)自己把錢夾忘在了家里，入場(chǎng)券也在他的錢夾中。
【學(xué)生習(xí)作】
Ma Hu got two tickets of (1) a wonderful football match between Quanxing and Guoan. He was thinking of invite (2) his good friend Zhao Huayang to watch it together. He gave him a call and told him to meet at the gate of Xinhua Park after class and then had dinner (3) together.
They met each other on time and had good dinner (4) in a restaurant. When the waiter brought them the bill. Ma Hu found that he left (5) his wallet at home. The two tickets kept (6) in the wallet, too.
(1)of在這里不是表示所有關(guān)系，所以應(yīng)把of改成for，表示“用途”。
(2)動(dòng)詞invite在介詞of的后面，應(yīng)把它變?yōu)楱Cing形式。
(3)連詞and連接的應(yīng)該是兩個(gè)并列的`動(dòng)詞不定式，所以應(yīng)把had改為to have。
(4)這里注意dinner前面有形容詞修飾時(shí)，那么應(yīng)在形容詞前面加a。
(5)應(yīng)把left改成had left。因?yàn)榈健鞍l(fā)現(xiàn)”時(shí)為止前面的動(dòng)作已經(jīng)完成，要用過去完成時(shí)態(tài)。
(6)此處是被動(dòng)語態(tài)，應(yīng)加上were。
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這是一篇根據(jù)漢語提示寫作的作文，也是中考題中常常采用的一種寫作方式。寫作中要求要點(diǎn)齊全，時(shí)態(tài)準(zhǔn)確，短語、句型運(yùn)用較為恰當(dāng)即可得高分。本文要點(diǎn)齊全，較好地體現(xiàn)了寫作要求。只是文中細(xì)小錯(cuò)誤較多，這會(huì)影響獲取高分。
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